Sunday, September 4, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday post #1




The Ark Hotel: Before the Dawn is an erotic romance with strong romance. Before the Dawn has been submitted to Sizzler Intoxications. These six sentences have not been professionally edited by our editor.

Setup:

Angie met a woman and a man who give back in a “Pay it Forward” sense. Outside of the restaurant, Noah starts to see some truth from Angie’s abused past. He is trying to show her that not all men will hit.

Our six:

“I thought he loved me. I thought if I tried hard enough I could be better and then he would be better.”

A strong hand lifted her chin from her chest and wiped away the glistening drops. “Angie, love doesn’t leave these kind of marks.”

She froze at his tender touch, then backed away suddenly. Gathering herself together again, Angie put the brakes on her fluttering heart.

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We hope you enjoyed our six today. We would love to hear from you. Thanks for stopping by! Have a great Sunday!

Rhea Archer


16 comments:

Denny S. Bryce said...

I like. Very nice six.

vampiremorbius said...

great six

Katie Harper said...

So tragic. Wonderful emotion. Great six!!

sarahballance said...

Nice, tender six. Love her internal struggle.

Davee said...

I enjoyed this! thank you for posting. I think it's good to tackle tough subjects in our writings, maybe fiction will even help someone who relates to the scenario.

Kellie Kamryn said...

That line 1st line really stabbed me in the heart b/c it reminded me of what I did to keep things together with my ex. Great 6! really felt something there...

Emily Cale said...

Very nice. Love the little glimpse into the character's emotions.

Carrie Ann Ryan said...

Oh, Nice six! :-)Keeps me wanting more!

Cara Bristol said...

Nice six. Enjoyed it.

Taryn Kincaid said...

Nicely done. Love his line that love doesn't leave marks. Perfect.

Summer said...

Very sweet and tender six!!

Kathleen Grieve said...

Sad! Wish she would let him comfort her!! Conflicted filled Six!!

Vivien Dean said...

Great emotion. Thanks for sharing!

Jean said...

Loved this six! So why didn't he get better when she did?

An Open Book said...

How tender, touching and sensual- great 6
Dawne P

Pablo Michaels said...

I love the line when he says, Love does not leave these kind of marks." Very well done.